SCENE 1
INT: Poorly lit hotel room
Black screen reads DAY 3, 4:00pm
The scene opens with a birds eye view of two groups of people opposite each other with a table in the middle, and two breifcases in front of them. Frank is sitting on one side with Charlie standing behind him whilst "Big Pete", who is in fact a skinny, scrawny little man, is sitting opposite with a muscly male character behind him. Both Frank and Big Pete exchange unsure and suspicious glances. Big Pete then slightly opens his briefcase revealing a mass amount of cash inside. As Frank's eyes light up, Pete slams the case shut. In retatliation to this, Frank opens his case slightly to present what appears to be bags upon bags of crack cocaine. Big Pete doesn't hesitate to reach out for the goods and so Frank suddenly slams the suitcase shut too. A few more tense looks are given by the characters as the characters slide their briefcases across the table to initiate a switch. As soon as the case of money is in Franks hands there is a cut away of Frank and Charlie sprinting down a corridor, leaving Big Pete standing helplessly at the doorway shaking his fists at the pair. Triumphant music is played and there are numerous two shots of the pair comically running away. Frank trying to hold on to his hat and the briefcase whilst Charlie is just trying to not fall over! They both look at each other, still running, and laugh at what the have just achieved.
A black screen then reads DAY 1: 11:08am
SCENE 2
EXT: Street in Estate in which they live
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street hands in their pockets kicking a can and wasting time as usual. When suddenly Frank spots a "FOR SALE" sign on a car window that he likes the look of. He goes towards it to get a better look and we see a close up of the sign selling the car for £6000. He ponders the idea of how to get money whilst rubbing his chin imagining how good it would be to have this car and finally have something to do with his days! Meanwhile, Charlie is uninterested and just looking at the car because Frank is. out of no where, Charlie pulls out a cookie and there is a slow motion extreme close up of him taking a bite. Like lightning, Frank is hit with, what he deems to be, a flawless idea! Clicking his fingers and expressing his excitement to Charlie he jumps around and points to the cookie as if the plan should be obvious! Frank runs off screen to put his plan into action whilst Charlie, still very confused, carries on eating his cookie. Frank walks back into the shot and as he drags Charlie out a black out comes in from the side.
SCENE 3
EXT: Street in Estate they live
"DING DONG!!" (sound of doorbell)
A door opens to find Frank and Charlie standing there wearing banners reading "cookies" and they are holding a box each. Frank holds out his hand (implying payment) as Charlie thrusts the box of cookies at the camera (act as a customer - point of view shot) The camera/ customer shakes his head and shuts the door. Another doorbell sounds and the same thing happens again in a different house. A third doorbell rings and this time when they answer the door, Frank and Charlie are on their knees begging for just one box of cookies to be bought, but the customer just doesn't want to know. The pleading expression on Charlie's face becomes even more desperate as he stands up and takes a step closer to the camera. This threatens the customer and he punches Charlie in the face. Once again Frank is struck by a brilliant idea (as this one failed) and as he clicks his fingers a black screen ends the scene.
SCENE 3
EXT: A street in the area they live
The scene opens with a black screen fade, revealing Charlie, bandaged round his eyes and clutching at a (help the blind) box. Frank is with him and almost like a trader of a market stall, trying to pull in punters to give them money. Long shots are then taken of the surrounding road and it is clear that there is no one around so they sit down. All of a sudden, a young man aged 20 or 30 comes along and Frank is instantly up and begging for cash for his poor friend. Charlie gets up with his arms out stretched as if he cannot see the young man, blindly suggesting he put money in the box. The man pulls up his hood and continues to walk. Charlie then throws the box on the floor, pulls down his bandage and shakes his fist at the unknown man. Frank immediately nudges him, insisting he puts the bandage back over his eyes and he shuffles quickly to do it. When he does he begins to walk with his hands out as if he really is blind. Whilst Charlie is walking around like that, Frank observes the man that they had just encountered. He crossed the road and is now talking into the window of a car. Frank clicks his fingers and the scene fades to black.
SCENE 4 (SCENE 1 again but now in order of the story, SCENE 4)
INT: Poorly lit hotel room
The scene opens with a birds eye view of two groups of people opposite each other with a table in the middle, and two breifcases in front of them. Frank is sitting on one side with Charlie standing behind him whilst "Big Pete", who is in fact a skinny, scrawny little man, is sitting opposite with a muscly male character behind him. Both Frank and Big Pete exchange unsure and suspicious glances. Big Pete then slightly opens his briefcase revealing a mass amount of cash inside. As Frank's eyes light up, Pete slams the case shut. In retatliation to this, Frank opens his case slightly to present what appears to be bags upon bags of crack cocaine. Big Pete doesn't hesitate to reach out for the goods and so Frank suddenly slams the suitcase shut too. A few more tense looks are given by the characters as the characters slide their briefcases across the table to initiate a switch. Frank opens the case fully and he is laughing and high fiving Charlie as they finally have the money needed for the car. Big Pete opens his case fully and with a smug smile takes out on of the bags. Frank and Charlie freeze as they watch Pete's actions closely. Slowly, Pete opens a bag and empties some of the contents into his hand... there is then a cut away to Frank losening his colar of his shirt and he gulps (sound of gulp). Pete licks the tip of his pinky finger and dabs it into the powder. As this happens, a black and white flashback is shown of Frank and Charlie laughing their heads off, filling plastic sandwich bags of flour. Then back to real time (slow motion) Pete tastes the powder on his finger. The film then goes back into normal paced filming and Frank aggressively blows the powder into Pete's face; blinding him temporarily. Frank and Charlie make a dash for the door and we then see the pair running out from the outside. Triumphant music is played and there are numerous two shots of the pair comically running away. Frank trying to hold on to his hat and the briefcase whilst Charlie is just trying to not fall over! They both look at each other, still running, and laugh at what the have just achieved. The scene 9and film) end with a freeze frame of them running and laughing at each other.
ROLL CREDITS
As the credits are being shown there are numerous pictures of them with the car they bought.
Sunday 31 October 2010
Final Script
SCENE 1
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.(Frank and Charlie look at each other
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen: DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads: "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted. The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car to Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them. They don’t. (Close up of the contents of their pockets: coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlie’s disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises it’s the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea.
He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, and then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
End.
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Estate
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'Brownies' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)They rustle the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Split screen of three doors. Each frame showing Frank and Charlie attempting to sell cookies and one after the other the door slams.
Fade to black
Charlie and Frank walk down the street tired and disappointed from their lack of sales. Frank turns to look at Charlie and sees him nibbling the cookie. Charlie offers Frank one. Frank gets annoyed and flicks him in the eye (flicking sound) and turns to walk aways. Charlie tries to follow him still blinded walks into a lamppost. Frank looks back. (Light bulb animation)
Charlie and Frank walk past the camera. Close up of Franks face.
Scene 4
EXT. Residential Estate
Title screen reads DAY 2: 11.51am
The camera zooms out from Franks face to reveal Charlie bandaged up for the Blind man scam.
(Sound of money pot)
Bucket reads ‘Help the blind boy’ cutaway to Empty Street (cricket sound)
Frankie and Charlie seem to have given up and Frank sees someone coming in the distance. Frank hits Charlie to get back into roll. As the man approaches Frank hold the bucket up to him but his attempt fails as the man just sniggers and walks past.
Frank and Charlie are annoyed at the mans gestures. Frank shouts back at the man. Charlie copies. The man stops turns and flinches at them whilst scowling. Frank and Charlie both jump back. As Charlie continues to act blind Frank watches where the man as he walks up to a car and exchanges packages at the car window. Frank squints and sees large wad of cash. Frank is shocked at large amount of money frank grabs Charlie and follows man. Frank and Charlie are well hidden as they follow the man around street corners and into a swanky hotel.
Arrive at room 28. Still well hidden they notice the man drop a package as he walks into a suite. Frank rushes to pick it up and opens it to find a bag of drugs inside; believing that this is what got the man his big wad of cash. (Light bulb animation) Frank gets his final idea. The door to the suite then opens behind Frank and the same man is standing there looking at the pair.
MAN: You two? You been followin’ me?!
FRANK: (nervously) na, na, na we’re here for the same reason you are…
MAN: You here to see Big Pete?
FRANK: Erm, yeah.
MAN: What you got?
Frank reveals the package he just picked up and the man looks inside, surprised that Frank has drugs.
FRANK: There’s plenty more where that came from.
MAN: Come back tomorrow and you better deliver. Try and scrub up a bit too yeah?
(Camera shows Franks appearance)
SCENE 5 (Replay of scene 1)
INT: Hotel corridor/room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
(Sound of ‘groovy’ 70s music) Frank and Charlie strut down the corridor in their new suits, Charlie holding the briefcase full of “goods” as Frank signals to let him do all the talking. The door opens and the man (bodyguard type) is standing there. Man laughs as he shakes his head at their outfits and the pair enters the room.
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: You got the stuff?(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: Yeah we got it (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Frank nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut. Suspicious glances are exchanged as they slowly slide the briefcases across the table to one another. As soon as Frank has hold of the briefcase full of money, he and Charlie open it celebrating and high fiving. Frank stops dead and darts a look at Big Pete, who has also opened his briefcase, and emptied the contents of a bag into his hand for a taste test. As Big Pete dips his Pinky finger in the “drugs” and raises it towards his mouth there is a FLASHBACK – Showing Frank and Charlie laughing and filling sandwich bags with flour and sugar (make clear to audience). The scene then snaps back to real time and Big Pete’s’ finger reaches his mouth. Frank panics. Close ups of Pete’s face as he tastes the flour (slow motion). Frank then has a shocked and worried expression, he gasps. The slow motion images stop and Frank blows the “drugs” in Big Pete’s face, grabs the money and scrambles out the room.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the door. (Triumphant music) As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in background wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs. Frank and Charlie manage to out run the bodyguard. In an act of celebration, they jump and high five each other. Images freezes, slowly fades to black and the credits roll. Images are then shown of them buying the car and being in it etc.
END
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.(Frank and Charlie look at each other
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen: DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads: "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted. The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car to Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them. They don’t. (Close up of the contents of their pockets: coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlie’s disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises it’s the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea.
He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, and then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
End.
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Estate
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'Brownies' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)They rustle the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Split screen of three doors. Each frame showing Frank and Charlie attempting to sell cookies and one after the other the door slams.
Fade to black
Charlie and Frank walk down the street tired and disappointed from their lack of sales. Frank turns to look at Charlie and sees him nibbling the cookie. Charlie offers Frank one. Frank gets annoyed and flicks him in the eye (flicking sound) and turns to walk aways. Charlie tries to follow him still blinded walks into a lamppost. Frank looks back. (Light bulb animation)
Charlie and Frank walk past the camera. Close up of Franks face.
Scene 4
EXT. Residential Estate
Title screen reads DAY 2: 11.51am
The camera zooms out from Franks face to reveal Charlie bandaged up for the Blind man scam.
(Sound of money pot)
Bucket reads ‘Help the blind boy’ cutaway to Empty Street (cricket sound)
Frankie and Charlie seem to have given up and Frank sees someone coming in the distance. Frank hits Charlie to get back into roll. As the man approaches Frank hold the bucket up to him but his attempt fails as the man just sniggers and walks past.
Frank and Charlie are annoyed at the mans gestures. Frank shouts back at the man. Charlie copies. The man stops turns and flinches at them whilst scowling. Frank and Charlie both jump back. As Charlie continues to act blind Frank watches where the man as he walks up to a car and exchanges packages at the car window. Frank squints and sees large wad of cash. Frank is shocked at large amount of money frank grabs Charlie and follows man. Frank and Charlie are well hidden as they follow the man around street corners and into a swanky hotel.
Arrive at room 28. Still well hidden they notice the man drop a package as he walks into a suite. Frank rushes to pick it up and opens it to find a bag of drugs inside; believing that this is what got the man his big wad of cash. (Light bulb animation) Frank gets his final idea. The door to the suite then opens behind Frank and the same man is standing there looking at the pair.
MAN: You two? You been followin’ me?!
FRANK: (nervously) na, na, na we’re here for the same reason you are…
MAN: You here to see Big Pete?
FRANK: Erm, yeah.
MAN: What you got?
Frank reveals the package he just picked up and the man looks inside, surprised that Frank has drugs.
FRANK: There’s plenty more where that came from.
MAN: Come back tomorrow and you better deliver. Try and scrub up a bit too yeah?
(Camera shows Franks appearance)
SCENE 5 (Replay of scene 1)
INT: Hotel corridor/room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
(Sound of ‘groovy’ 70s music) Frank and Charlie strut down the corridor in their new suits, Charlie holding the briefcase full of “goods” as Frank signals to let him do all the talking. The door opens and the man (bodyguard type) is standing there. Man laughs as he shakes his head at their outfits and the pair enters the room.
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: You got the stuff?(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: Yeah we got it (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Frank nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut. Suspicious glances are exchanged as they slowly slide the briefcases across the table to one another. As soon as Frank has hold of the briefcase full of money, he and Charlie open it celebrating and high fiving. Frank stops dead and darts a look at Big Pete, who has also opened his briefcase, and emptied the contents of a bag into his hand for a taste test. As Big Pete dips his Pinky finger in the “drugs” and raises it towards his mouth there is a FLASHBACK – Showing Frank and Charlie laughing and filling sandwich bags with flour and sugar (make clear to audience). The scene then snaps back to real time and Big Pete’s’ finger reaches his mouth. Frank panics. Close ups of Pete’s face as he tastes the flour (slow motion). Frank then has a shocked and worried expression, he gasps. The slow motion images stop and Frank blows the “drugs” in Big Pete’s face, grabs the money and scrambles out the room.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the door. (Triumphant music) As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in background wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs. Frank and Charlie manage to out run the bodyguard. In an act of celebration, they jump and high five each other. Images freezes, slowly fades to black and the credits roll. Images are then shown of them buying the car and being in it etc.
END
Monday 4 October 2010
Treatment 1- When your gone.
Tagline:Does true love truly die?
Steve returns home from a hard day at work hoping to see his wife and daughter waiting for him at the front door, reality sets in and realises that his wife and son past away a month ago. Every night he would cook a meal and set out a table for three, his lack of consciousness and refusal of acceptance would lead him to living in an alternative reality.
Steve returns home from a hard day at work hoping to see his wife and daughter waiting for him at the front door, reality sets in and realises that his wife and son past away a month ago. Every night he would cook a meal and set out a table for three, his lack of consciousness and refusal of acceptance would lead him to living in an alternative reality.
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